Sorry i didn't reply to this sooner man!! I completely missed it!!
I like it but here are a few pointers:
1. I think your flow needs a bit of work. You got the lyrics, you got your own style but the way you deliver them could be a bit better. But the more you rap, the more this will get better. Its not even something you consciously think about. It just happens!!
2. Use original instrumentals. I know its easy and less hassle to use other peoples music, but it adds that touch of originality if you use your own. I know this is the way a lot of rappers start out but it's not something you should get into the habit of doing
3. Clarity. Some parts i didn't quite get. If your gonna record a song, make it the best song you've ever done. You don't to keep re-recording songs because some people didn't get it or understand it! Believe me i've been there and its [b]VERY[/b] tedious!!
Other than that it was real good! Keep doing your thing man!! :music: :thumb: :music: