analogue Posted January 5, 2007 Report Share Posted January 5, 2007 (edited) Nothing too special and i wrote in like 2 minutes but here you go anyway Chrous: Time to rock time to get funky time to get crazy time to get busy yo it's time to rock. time to get funky time to get crazy Music is pumping people are jumping crowed is shoutin while the DJ is scratchin Lights are flashing drinks are spilling people are falling and the bass is pumpin Chorus: Time to rock time to get funky time to get crazy time to get busy yo it's time to rock. time to get funky time to get crazy Tunes are playing crowed is pumpin floor is shaking and the DJ's spinin. Place get's busy and the people get funky Chrous: Time to rock time to get funky time to get crazy time to get busy yo it's time to rock. time to get funky time to get crazy Edited January 5, 2007 by analogue Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Da Brakes Posted January 5, 2007 Report Share Posted January 5, 2007 I think you need to work on making your bars a little longer and also your rhyme scheme needs to be a little more complex. If you were to record this it would be a VERY short song! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
J-o-e Posted January 5, 2007 Report Share Posted January 5, 2007 I'd say half a minute to a minute, :lolsign: i done this alot when i started writing, keep at it and you'll get there one day Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
analogue Posted January 5, 2007 Author Report Share Posted January 5, 2007 (edited) Well if i added in about 3 minutes of beats and scratches it might be longer :lolsign: Thanks for your honest opinions. and these are the first lyrics i wrote that actually rhyme and i'm happy with that fact lol Edited January 5, 2007 by analogue Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Luigie Posted January 5, 2007 Report Share Posted January 5, 2007 The whole song looks like a bunch of choruses :4-only1ha: keep it up dude...i used to do rhymes like that, lol Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
analogue Posted January 6, 2007 Author Report Share Posted January 6, 2007 Well this is another song that i'm working on. This one isnt finished yet The word just has alot of hate and we can do alot to make it great people taking drugs in the street and people are murderd every week but we can stop and make a difference we can make a change for a better place what do you think? Am i improving?, Is it worse than the last one? or Do i need to do some more work? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lerkot Posted January 6, 2007 Report Share Posted January 6, 2007 Its better, not great but... better. I dont know if difference rhymes with better place though, but maybe it does. Im no expert. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Turntable Posted January 6, 2007 Report Share Posted January 6, 2007 I'd say you first have to work on your rhyming ability before you go working on your subject. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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