Hey Ya'll New Song Called "Angel In My Eyez"

[J-o-e]

Whatsup Ya'll it's ya boy, i've been busy working alot so i have had NO time at all

To check this place out and i've had barely any time to even write what i'm feeling

Which is never a good thing and I advise all artists out there to take 10 minutes

to jot down what they feeling at the time, because this world hurts, but anyway

I'm sorry i havent been around but here it is, J-o-e "Angel In My Eyez" Compliments

And Complaints are welcome, I need to improve since I havent Wrote anything.

Oh and if anyone has anyviews on my chorus please post because I'm useless

at them damn things haha.....

Keep it real every1 And thanks for the responses in advance...

Angel In My Eyes Written By J-o-e 17/09/07.

Everyday I wake up and I got a angel in my eyes

To capture your heart will be like a million pound prize

Doesn’t matter what I feel for you, I’ll be real 2 u

When u hurt I’ll try and heal for u, girl I’d kill for u

What’s the difference between a man and a monster

It’s like being a free agent and being ****ed by a sponsor

But I don’t give a answer, I lay right down your side

U know I got a ego and no one can ever take my pride

U got me caught in a vice grip, but I will never slip

When I’m mad I swear I won’t flip, drunk I won’t trip

I’ll be a man at heart and I could be a man at war

Now doing things u done why did u go to that for?

Overdosed on some stupid drug about a pointless thug

Nobody ever showed u love, all u ever needed was a hug…

I got angel in my eyes

A million pound surprise

I got angel in my eyes

Will u be my complete prize?

When I do things against your will, girl I don’t forget it

I don’t shrug it off like other guys, girl I do regret it

I don’t mean by sneaking out to go with all the guys

The difference is that I can tell when u telling lies

U don’t even know it, but I know u like the back of my hand

I feel like living in a trash can than go 2 Afghanistan

I rather be with the one I love than be will a trick

Do u want a man with brains or brawns, u can pick

I’m not pressuring you, u full grown with a good home

But a good man u had girl u was better of being alone

I know there’s guys u like and they always be better than

but u don’t call me on the phone? U can write me a letter then

I’m not a stupid man baby but u just made me crazy

I thought I could have a happy home wit u, maybe a baby

I got angel in my eyes

A million pound surprise

I got angel in my eyes

Will u be my complete prize?

Angel in my eyes till the day that I see that prize

I’ll never die, I’ll never lie and I swear Ur a surprise

When I was lost in the dirt, knowing it couldn’t work

I knew heartbreak would come, knowing it wouldn’t hurt

But it did, worse than a bullet going thru Ur brain

Maybe love is the reason why Van Gough went insane

Made beautiful art as a artist but ****ed up in the head

Or Shakespeare when nobody knew what he just said

He explained love at the highest point, who could see?

But 400 years later we finally learn about poetry?

Girl Ur my mind soul and even the ground I walk on

U the inspiration in my life for me just to talk on

On the phone for hours, deciding if u sweet or sour

Doesn’t matter to me because I’ll still give u flowers

Every Friday turn up outside your house with a suit on

Take you out for dinner with that free marks and sparks coupon

Yea….

I got angel in my eyes

A million pound surprise

I got angel in my eyes

Will u be my complete prize?

[mfuqua23]

"What’s the difference between a man and a monster

It’s like being a free agent and being ****ed by a sponsor" - I really liked those lines.

"But I don’t give a answer, I lay right down your side" - In continuing the idea of the verse's lines, I'd change it up. Take out the 'but I don't give an answer' and put something else in. Becuz techinically, you did give an answer what the difference between a man and a monster is. Just a subtle thing you can fix.

"I’m not pressuring you, u full grown with a good home

But a good man u had girl u was better of being alone" - I don't get those lines. If 'she' had a good man, why is it better for her to be alone?

"...worse than a bullet going thru Ur brain

Maybe love is the reason why Van Gough went insane" - Liked these lines particularly as well.

You done way better with stuff before this. Slowly getting back into the groove of things apparently. And yeah, rework the chorus. Maybe something like...

"I got an angel in my eyes/

walkin this earth but came from the skies/

I got an angel in my eyes/

Love her so much, want her part of my life/"

Just rework it.

[J-o-e]

Thanks alot FuQ, I will concentrate alot more now, I knew i had to improve the chorus anyway, but the lines u pointed out are some very good points, i'll be changing them up some point in the future, thanks for your views...

Peace.