Loco Posted August 23, 2004 Report Share Posted August 23, 2004 I did it just like FuQ told me! I wrote down what i felt [u] Tragedy[/u] I woke up on the street corner, gun shots, blood flows, tragedy goin on, Old women got shot what the hell goes on, I suppose a lot of things in the past went wrong! Young gees that spark a lot, actin’ like dogs, they’re just bark a lot, Ain’t no talk or sum’, robbery in the park wit’ chumps, Ready to kill, they don’t care, if it’s dark or not! Deal wit drugs and stuff, got no future cos’ the world just sucks, For them everythings ****ed up! Money cash hoes, is the motto, smokin’ green, **** a hoe, again sippin on the bottle, I close my eyes, I wish to reach a better place, Which is, like an isle where people wishin’ reachin’ better days! But dreamin dreams ain’t enough we all gotta do sum’, All gotta stand up now it’s time for revolution! I'm not sure, i mean it's straight from the heart, but lyricly? write down what cha think peace Loco Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
mfuqua23 Posted August 24, 2004 Report Share Posted August 24, 2004 I read the flow no problem. It'z a good rhyme. It'z all real things spoken of. A regular topic 4 hip hop. I hope that when U wrote this, U didn't speed thru it. When U write what U feel, it doesn't have 2 be, and usually isn't quick. But if this is what U felt, it'z an ok rhyme. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Da Brakes Posted August 24, 2004 Report Share Posted August 24, 2004 Its good! My advice to you is keep on writing! I dont think you can comment too much on these types of raps because they come straight from the writers heart! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bigted Posted August 24, 2004 Report Share Posted August 24, 2004 [quote=Da Brakes,Aug 24 2004, 02:12 AM]Its good! My advice to you is keep on writing! I dont think you can comment too much on these types of raps because they come straight from the writers heart![/quote] No matter what you do, rap from your heart! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Prince Posted August 24, 2004 Report Share Posted August 24, 2004 I feel the flow of this Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
J-o-e Posted August 24, 2004 Report Share Posted August 24, 2004 :ditto: i think its good Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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