Silver Tiger Posted August 25, 2004 Report Share Posted August 25, 2004 Hey everyone. I said I've been working on music and my movie. Well I just started my movie yesterday and last night this came to me and I kept writing. This is the first full song I'm posting here. I hope to have a beat and have it recorded by the end of the year. Simply titled "Life": Verse One: The intellectuals said I was lame But then quickly they’re tame I’m rising past intellectual conquests Scrapping Satan’s test’s I won’t press It’s the lessons we learn as we come back to our turn The lines are short Back to spiritual resorts Demons flooding in And the whole thing contorts Running round in circles Will my words be empty Or will I live what I speak I’m at the top of the peak The decisions are made Jump. I’m ready My screams burning out the common fade I’m back with a blast I made it Fear and truth desegregated Debts fulfilled, I paid it Verse Two: We move from peak to peak We’re worried what’s to come When you think you can’t get higher Then your challenge is won Write them down Then go and live your life loud Cause fear ain’t proud Exhaustion from caution Living a lifeless life We all go through strife But the hero’s not the zero with his throat to a knife Verse Three: Survive life’s short stories What was horror will live to score ya The tell of the tales What you thought was big, to others in comparison fails Don’t be scared until you’re lying down with your hands taking nails Life’s a trip of questions Answer them honestly Simple sessions bring recollections of the truth you first knew We’re sitting in stew Cook the pot- And the plots up to you God Blessa! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
mfuqua23 Posted August 25, 2004 Report Share Posted August 25, 2004 Overall, I thought it was pretty good. Kinda short in the 2nd & 3rd verse, but some songs have verses like that. (ex. 2pac's So Many Tears, some r only a 5 set) The lyrics give the audience something 2 think about. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
J-o-e Posted August 25, 2004 Report Share Posted August 25, 2004 I liked the lyrics, but i was wondering what kind of beat you was thinking to have? since theres only 3 verses and the 2nd and 3rd one are quite short, it will only be a 2 minute song, so i was wondering if you were going to put a chorus or a bridge in this song at least 1nce, just to break it up, but nice lyrics man! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bigted Posted August 25, 2004 Report Share Posted August 25, 2004 Short, sweet, and to the point, I like it! I got a question for u though, is it gonna be like an ol' school rap song where it doesn't have a hook, or are u gonna put a hook in it? Other than that though, I think it's very good, u got ur point across well, not all songs have to be long like mine are! :thumb: Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Da Brakes Posted August 25, 2004 Report Share Posted August 25, 2004 [quote=bigted,Aug 25 2004, 01:23 PM]Short, sweet, and to the point, I like it! I got a question for u though, is it gonna be like an ol' school rap song where it doesn't have a hook, or are u gonna put a hook in it? Other than that though, I think it's very good, u got ur point across well, not all songs have to be long like mine are! :thumb:[/quote] :ditto: Liked it! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
mfuqua23 Posted August 25, 2004 Report Share Posted August 25, 2004 U could always adjust a beat Loco, 2 the point where it fits each verse. There's nothing wrong wit a 2 minute song or so. Just as long as it'z good. :thumb: Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Prince Posted August 25, 2004 Report Share Posted August 25, 2004 [quote=mfuqua23,Aug 25 2004, 04:40 PM]U could always adjust a beat Loco[/quote] haha Loco hasn't replied in this thread man. Ditto to the others. Some nice points in there to think through. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Silver Tiger Posted August 25, 2004 Author Report Share Posted August 25, 2004 (edited) Thanks guys. To clear some things up. I know that the 2nd and 3rd verses are a little short. But the first verse a little long too. And I'm definitely trying to make a beat that will make this song all come together. No hook. No chorus. In fact I'm going to try to do more songs with no chorus'. Thanks for the replies and more replies are welcome. God Blessa! Edited August 25, 2004 by djsilvertiger Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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