J-o-e Posted September 3, 2004 Report Share Posted September 3, 2004 I thought i would put a rap towards MH's song "That Girl", here it is, its his chorus written, how do you think it would sound? ------------------- That Girl i looked at that girl but she aint all that dont you realise i only want you back you dont compare to them hollywood bitches you thought you turned me just like them snitches falling down ditches, your my women and please believe why i dont where my heart on my sleeve begging please falling down to my knees, crying girl im not lying, believe me when im high and say im trying but you dont believe me and theres no trust which turns to lust in a furouis fust to make a fight can you see the light its so ****ing bright ive loved you will all my heart knowin one day we will never be apart girl ive never called you a bitch a ho or a tart just look in my eyes and please realize that my lies arnt even lies so why look suprised let me take it back to the day we first met my terrible opening day, you wishing you'd forget but i came back and i dont regret, the bet that made you my girl cause you though it was so sweet tender love made you mine in a heart beat so if i look at other girls, they dont compare to you i love you girl, and believe me i always will do, ugh If I Wanted...That Girl Than I Would Be With...That Girl But That One Aint For Me... Shes Fine As Hell But She Always Be That Girl, Nuttin More Than That Girl No Matter What She Do She Dont Compare To U....(Haha) walking down the street hand to hand i looked back but im just a man its hard for you to understand my plan but i bet you my conversation stopped your hesistation that my information increased your elevation maybe the reason you discussed it with that guy made me get concussed and thats why i had to fly im gonna miss the way you smile if you leave i had to get my own space, you needed to breathe we started when we was young and loved you since then why do you think i would cheat because im well known? your my queen and im the king who owns a golden thrown but i need you by my side for the rest of my life not only my gangster bitch but someday you can be my wife so dont start sayin i was lookin' cause my heart you tookin' your burnt my heart and left it to be cookin' just get into your head that i dont want to be away from you untill im dead i dont wana get out of bed, just remember what i said loved and lost aint better than never loved at all cause its like your ontop of a building then happenin to fall believe me i've been throught the stress and complication im looking to get my medication, dont wana save the nation just wana save you girl and thats all i wana say i dont want you to go away, and hopefully find a better way If I Wanted...That Girl Than I Would Be With...That Girl But That One Aint For Me... Shes Fine As Hell But She Always Be That Girl, Nuttin More Than That Girl No Matter What She Do She Dont Compare To U....(Haha) do you forgive me or forget me would you live with me or regret me tell me these answers as im about to ask the arguements we had, it was a blast from the pass remembering the day you wantin to whoop my ass i wanted you to do it quicker so i can get back to my chair and drink my liquour i treated you like **** and i cant forgive myself for doing this but believe me i was being cussed and i just had to diss you stood by my side, dont leave me and hide your gonna hurt my pride, that girl dnt mean **** to me why cant you see, your the girl i wanted and did it probably but didnt, so i shouldnt and couldnt and wouldnt **** it up but i did so i gotta smack and slap somebody up. you made me angry but made me sad i was all good but when i bet that girl i was bad please forgive me for only looking, its not like i cheated lookin at all these fancy things, i froze your hands and feet made you smile and through this it was worth while when i was hustled to the streets my homies making me freestyle so forget that girl shes out of my life she aint my life materail you can be my wife what you say huh? If I Wanted...That Girl Than I Would Be With...That Girl But That One Aint For Me... Shes Fine As Hell But She Always Be That Girl, Nuttin More Than That Girl No Matter What She Do She Dont Compare To U....(Haha) -------------- feedback will be nice, thanks 4 readin J-o-e Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Admin Hero1 Posted September 4, 2004 Admin Report Share Posted September 4, 2004 look i gotta be honest.. that was damn awful... [b]you dont compare to them hollywood bitches girl ive never called you a bitch a ho or a tart why do you think i would cheat because im well known? not only my gangster bitch but someday you can be my wife [/b] :pleasxplain: come on man these lines are terrible..keep it real please Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
mfuqua23 Posted September 4, 2004 Report Share Posted September 4, 2004 I don't really know if I can compare. Whose MH? MArcus Houston? :dunno: Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
J-o-e Posted September 4, 2004 Author Report Share Posted September 4, 2004 ive gotten terrible feedback from u for ages, so u think i listen to you, cause u dnt curse, so what i curse, its not like ur ever gonna make it, ****, yeah MH is marcus Housten, just a bigger beat in the song could make it aight, i thought it was ok for me Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Prince Posted September 4, 2004 Report Share Posted September 4, 2004 I agree with Tim. Only rhyme about stuff that's real. Not lies. This song is fake, because it's all out of your head. And FuQ and Tim are far closer to making it than you are Joe, because they don't talk **** in their rhymes. You ask for feedback and get it, damn. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
J-o-e Posted September 4, 2004 Author Report Share Posted September 4, 2004 what u mean they lies, they aint damn lies, why would i rap about lies, first u call my lyrics and now u say that im lyin well F*$k u, Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Prince Posted September 4, 2004 Report Share Posted September 4, 2004 This mans funny. Yes, lies. Example "because I'm well known". For real? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Enemy of the State Posted September 4, 2004 Report Share Posted September 4, 2004 (edited) Wow what the dickens?! Joe calm down man. I think you need a few days cooling off period! Also, can people check out my post "My rhyme"! Feedback appreciated, especially if anybody can work out the hidden message :sonny: Edited September 4, 2004 by Enemy of the State Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Prince Posted September 4, 2004 Report Share Posted September 4, 2004 [quote=Enemy of the State,Sep 4 2004, 08:39 PM]Wow what the dickens?![/quote] Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bigted Posted September 5, 2004 Report Share Posted September 5, 2004 Why would wanna remake a song from somebody that does songs with B2K, that's wack! You gotta be able to take criticism if you wanna make it, if somebody doesn't like they don't like it, you could do better, if you can't take the heat don't rap! :ditto: Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Prince Posted September 5, 2004 Report Share Posted September 5, 2004 [quote=bigted,Sep 5 2004, 01:59 AM]Why would wanna remake a song from somebody that does songs with B2K, that's wack! You gotta be able to take criticism if you wanna make it, if somebody doesn't like they don't like it, you could do better, if you can't take the heat don't rap! :ditto:[/quote] Word man, word. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members vegito Posted September 5, 2004 Members Report Share Posted September 5, 2004 that may be true but i think he was just being unfairley criticzed because he hwas being hardcore i dont see tim doing anybetter, and if u ain't got nothing nice to say then dont say it at all Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Admin Hero1 Posted September 5, 2004 Admin Report Share Posted September 5, 2004 hey that was constructive criticism.. i gave him quotes of lines that i thought were wack and where he wasnt keeping it real.. and vegito..whoever you are..he posted that wanting feedback..you would rather he gets no replies? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Admin Hero1 Posted September 5, 2004 Admin Report Share Posted September 5, 2004 [quote=J-o-e,Sep 4 2004, 12:49 PM]ive gotten terrible feedback from u for ages, so u think i listen to you, cause u dnt curse, so what i curse, its not like ur ever gonna make it, ****,[/quote] what the hell are you talking about? i never said anything about you cursing in my reply.. and you've posted some dope stuff before and ive told u that..so i dont know what you are talking about.. what are you rapping abt gangster bitches tho? what do you know about a gangtsa bitch..please enlighten me Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members vegito Posted September 5, 2004 Members Report Share Posted September 5, 2004 no but i just think you dont know or cant say whether he has been keeping it real or not what makes you the expert on keeping it real over evrybody else? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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