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[bagotrasho]

hey im gonna put some rhymes down and please be honest and tell me wut you think

Now i never rapped before

i just listenind to the hardcore

so now im stickin my head in the game

hopin wen i come out rap wont be the same

if you listen to my rhymes youll have a revelation

as my rhymes are sweepin the nation

no it aint a hallucination

im white and im kinda young

but my rhymes have sprung..themselves into your brain

now you cant get them out

you have to listen to me spout

everyday i make you wanna shout

so i used to listen to rappers dissin

each other and talkin ****

and i said man thats it

i wanna get in there and revolutionize

this ghetto rap has everyobdy hypnotized

they are mezmorized

so im gonna play it like big will

i aint goin hardcore but STILL

people will listen and buy my CD

im hopin the nation will fall in love with me

i just wanna get a peice of the fame

and theres alotta people doin the same

but i aint the same im different

but still im magnificent

my rhyme is great isnt it

so for the youth's sake

give me a break

ill show them that rap doesnt have to be hardcore

my rap will entertain more

just cuz im white doesnt mean i cant rhyme

some people say me doin this is a waste of time

they say ill never be big its just some crazy dream

of mine well i say forget you im sweet like a crispy creme

you see wut i mean

i dont mean to be gloatin but my rhymes are floatin

through your mind like a boat through the ocean

so thats how i roll no swearin nor jewels

my raps will rule

no fancy cars or women for me

no spinner hubcabs or rings that gleam

u may say i dont have good taste

just cuz i dont got a chain hangin from my neck to waist

so to the whole human race

i made look like a fool

but i just wanna get the kids back in school

get them off the street sellin drugs

i aint tryin to talk bad bout ghetto rappers but my rhymes aint turnin

kids into thugs

i may not no nuttin bout the ghetto

cuz i never lived there so your right I DONT NO WUT U WENT THROUGH

ill give you respect cuz u survived the test

the test of life

you had a harder test than me

cuz frankly i always had it easy

but just cuz you had a hard life and survived you aint to brag about it

you aint got to shout it

and you definatly dont got to tell us kids about it

so heres the rhyme i wrote

you may wanna take note

cuz you could use the quote

CALM IT DOWN

take it nice and easy

i love all the gangtsa rap

but i think its gettin outta hand

y cant there be more people like will and jazz

they showed us rap didnt always have to be a menace to society

gangtsa rap had people rioting

all JJFP was doing was quieting

ALL those people who were tryin to be thugs

wen they should just spend some time with their family mabye watch some tv while sittin on a rug

instead of watchin their dad sip from a coffe mug

he wasnt around no more cuz he was killed in the street

sellin dope and crack to kids who were tryin to be cool and stay with the beat

now this is my rap feat

i aint tryin to make your kids rebel im tryin to be their friend

thanks for listenin now this is the END

Edited February 26, 2005 by bagotrasho

[bagotrasho]

come on please tell me your opinion about my rhyme

[bigted]

That's ur 1st rhyme? It's pretty good, u could improve a lil' on the rhyme structure, but I felt the message that u were sayin' there, good job! btw, it's nice to see another Bulls fan here! :thumb:

[mfuqua23]

I agree. Just structure it better. And not to say the same too many times.

[bagotrasho]

thanks for your opinion i might gget another one on here soon

[zeffbean_8]

Started good then getting better in the middle then you started to fall off. But for your first time it's good. :jazzyinthehouse:

Edited March 16, 2005 by zeffbean_8