here's a verse

[Don Jiggy]

verse: guns and ammunition/

get ready for competition/

Hemi spit hotter rocks the heavyhitters stay missin/

the mic glissens cuz its my weopon of choice/

the ammunition is the wisdom in mind using my voice/

how many people you gon kill in yo verse/

i can do this rhyme without a curse/

or stickin anyone in a hearse/

my rhymes worsem they wont leave me alone/

so i see it as a destiny to get on the microphone/

and express what im feelin at that time in a rhyme/

like Bonnie and Clyde, natural born killers when we ride/

me and my mic 2005/

chorus: i cant see nobody/

but you and me/

on stage tag-teamin/

the crowd still screamin/

so lets go wit tha flow/

i gotta a whole lot mo/

lets flow til they scream for an encore/

me and my mic/

verse2: you gonna feel my reign/

I bring the pain/

I start a whole new era in this hip hop game/

I got tha courage of a suicide bomber/

and make my enemies hide in caves for years like Osama/

I been spitten for years im gettin harder/

i found joy now i shed no more tears like 2paca/

i keep the party jumpin from the front to tha rear/

rockin military gear i shake yo mind wit fear/

aint no better tag-team Kobe and Shaq, Jordan and Pippen/

me and my mic stay rippin/

im a keep dippin in my lac/

leaned over like my hat/

millionare like Bruce Wayne but i dont mess wit bats/

you got a question homie check tha stats/

my pockets stay plump like Monique and theyll never go flat/

(Chorus)

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[Don Jiggy]

i decided to just write the song instead of a verse, so yall can tell me whats wrong with it

:afro:

[bagotrasho]

5

some of it was good some of it i just couldnt feel the flow

[J-o-e]

i thought ya first verse was dope, but the second i couldnt feel the flow as much as the first

7/10.

[bigted]

I'll give it 7/10, it's better than most of the wackness out now, but there's still room for improvement, don't give up! :thumb:

[mfuqua23]

I give it 6 outta 10. I agree wit the whole 1st verse 2nd verse idea of everybody. I liked the 1st. It was really thought out and defined in a nice way. Multi-ed up too. the 2nd was more of a non stop punchline similes.

[Hero1]

iI give it a 6..the flow was good..but if you aint a millionaire dont say it in ya rhyme..keep it real :poke:

[Don Jiggy]

i give it a 1/10, i hate the song i made, for some reason i never like what i do

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