Fresh-Ta-Def Posted July 24, 2005 Report Share Posted July 24, 2005 Ok well sorry for all the swearing in this song but im not about to go all throught it hopefully the forum picks it up and *'s it out you know check it out Feed. this is old by the way probally when i was about 12... im 14 now holla back hook 1 (J-KNotz aka josh) THIS boy dont take no **** if you lookin for some beef, i aint scared to hit THIS boy just make the deal so all the other homies supplied with meals hook 2 (Blaze aka Brian) THIS boy dont take no **** if you lookin for some beef, i aint scared to hit THIS boy just make the deal so all the other homies supplied with meals verse 1 (Blaze aka Brian) I'm sick of motha****ers wantin' to battle~for~a~rep actin' arrogant on "the net", but they get shattered~if~they~step/ foo's don't know me, but they wanna try to make~a~name so they call mine out for attention, **** just ain't~the~same/ I'm mean, in general, no "subliminal disses"~or~"puns" I'm 1 of the only MC's who ain't all 'bout "bitches"~&~"guns"/ I been doin' my thing, so I can't be stopped now I climbed my way up, I'm solidified; can't be brought~down/ no to brag, but these fags act like I ain't put-in~work like I don't "beef", "cypher", "freestyle" or "fling~dirt"/ I only post my verses for feedback~&~criticism some take it too serious, I'm all 'bout Rap~&~Lyricism/ I can "uplift & remove spirits", like~"exorcisms" DiSS me or mention me & I'ma shred u by~"mechanism"/ this is just to let u know, I got nothin'~else~to~prove I've earned the respect I've given, that's the 1~thing~I~can't~lose/ on behalf of all my true homies - "Suck our dicks~haters!" u fakes bug, u ain't thugs, ur "scrubs"; like "6th~graders"/ if u take this to the heart, then I'm talkin'~to~u if not, just accept that there's nothing u can possibly~do/ from politics to the streets, I know u feel~my~pain my style & flow are unique, it's said "The Real~Shall~Reign"/ I'm well-on my way to the top, I'm rite~there try to see me? I'll give u nightmarez from just a slight~scare/ my delivery's on lock, can't no1 do~it~like~me if I weren't a "ghetto hustler", I'd probably spew~this~for~free/ but it takes soul, blood, sweat & tears to acheive~this~position I Set The Record Str8, cuz the ****in' needle~was~skippin'* hook 1 (Blaze aka Brian) THIS boy dont take no **** if you lookin for some beef, i aint scared to hit THIS boy just make the deal so all the other homies supplied with meals verse 2 (J-KNotz aka Josh) I've been hated for to long-now. flows gotten to strong-now. gotta stop, just Calm-down. but these niggaz keep testin fukin wit weapons, gon be askin some questions i'm gangsta straight from the streets so just stop snoop dogg tellin~em' drop it like its hot but its not ya'll niggas come real, thinkin you hot got a deal everyone gettin signed now, take a seat just lie-down get up, the ****~off, hood nigga the jump-off ya'll kno i been reppin the ****, best wit da clip in an the testin the grip, uderstand it for i come up in ya face an lay ya ****in brains all over the place cause you niggaz want beef motha ****az want war i come with the four four knockin down ya door whore cause every mother ****er needa get up get out cause you aint gon be talk-in with the clock-in ya mouth so when you hear me spit hear me walk here me talk study the **** so you aint gotta get knocked (you heard me) hook 2 (J-KNotz aka josh) THIS boy dont take no **** if you lookin for some beef, i aint scared to hit THIS boy just make the deal so all the other homies supplied with meals hook 1 (Blaze aka Brian) THIS boy dont take no **** if you lookin for some beef, i aint scared to hit THIS boy just make the deal so all the other homies supplied with meals Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
3cookies Posted July 24, 2005 Report Share Posted July 24, 2005 That was the wackest, weakest and worst flow I ever heard .... and the lyrical content coming from a 12 year old... was PATHETIC... :thumbsdown: :thumbsdown: :thumbsdown: God have mercy on you since ur 'supposedly' 14 now... :shakehead: There was nothing genius abt your flow... peace, cookie Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
3cookies Posted July 24, 2005 Report Share Posted July 24, 2005 try reflecting abit on these lost and found definitions... since u don't mind a little positive criticism... Lost is devalueing the influence you can have on young minds Found is setting positive examples for young children ← LOST is having nothing to rhyme about except sex, drugs, and violence and FOUND is when you create great music that can be considered timeless ← peace, cookie Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bigted Posted July 24, 2005 Report Share Posted July 24, 2005 (edited) Yeah that was wack man, you're rapping like a 50 Cent and Biggie wannabe, there's enough of that on the radio, try something original for a change for what's really on your mind, I can't take a 12-year old rapping about shootin' me with a 4-4 seriously! :thumbsdown: Edited July 24, 2005 by bigted Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jonny 5 Posted July 24, 2005 Report Share Posted July 24, 2005 not hatin, just giving feedback... that's exactly the kind of rap i don't like. Makes no sense a lot of the time, no message I want, no inspiration, no humour, no interesting similes or metaphors, not interesting... Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
WesSyde Posted July 24, 2005 Report Share Posted July 24, 2005 i concur with the others. i could barely read a line without havin somethin censored out. and i really hope you're of the african american dissent for using the n-word. there's no reason for 12 years olds to be cussin like that. i really hope that was one of ur worst raps. i hope u can appreciate real rap and what it was invented for. real rap is story tellin and havin a positive message. Will's song Lost & Found tells it all. i know what ur gonna say, i'm a hypocrite for tellin u not 2 give negative feedback to people then i do it 2 u. but what most people write on this forum, is respectable rap from the heart. u shouldn't expect us 2 condone using n-words and splattin peoples brains and stuff. that's not real man, that's lost and i hope u've found urself since then :word: Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bigted Posted July 24, 2005 Report Share Posted July 24, 2005 Hey I don't mind if a song has cursing in it but it's gotta make sense, the song has to have a point to it, what you wrote there made absolutely no sense at all, you're contradicting yourself one minute in the song about how you don't rap about bitches and guns then you rap about shootin' your 4-4, that's as contradictory rappers thanking God in their speeches and then talkin' about killing people, some gangsta rap has a message but a lot of it today doesn't, unless people are shootin' at your house constantly and you grew up in the projects like Nas, Ice Cube, and KRS-ONE, you have no reason to be rappin' about this at such a young age, like DMX said: "Do You"! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
3cookies Posted July 24, 2005 Report Share Posted July 24, 2005 you're contradicting yourself one minute in the song about how you don't rap about bitches and guns then you rap about shootin' your 4-4, that's as contradictory rappers thanking God in their speeches and then talkin' about killing people← :word: which coincides with my point with the video games too... I'd like to think younger WS fans would have more 'idealistic' lyrical content in their flow, representin abit more interesting thoughts according to their age group... and i DO mind abt the cussin, cuz of his age... I'm not even interested in entertaining conversations with kids online who think this kind of flow is whats happeniN! Their parent might not be here, but just think of me as the next door neighbor who believes in the old adage... "It takes a Village to Raise a Child"...and this is (supposedly) a child! I don't have a problem stopping my car to tell someone's child to put that dag on cigarette down, and PULL up your pants boy! What u showin ALL of your tail for? cuz i've done it... and they usually do it... Just knowing someone cares enough to say something, can make a difference... peace, cookie Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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Fresh-Ta-Def Posted July 24, 2005 Author Report Share Posted July 24, 2005 haha YES thanks you i just wanted to get people to see my whack stuff because i have hated on you all so much since i've been here thanks you i'm not lieing i will start to put up my real songs now thanks.. and im african american/ Columbian and its 2 different people in thsi sogng im the first person my name is Brian O'donnell and josh is my friend just to clear the contradicting up and yes im 14 now and i have grown up alot... sorry for the misconception Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
WesSyde Posted July 25, 2005 Report Share Posted July 25, 2005 well thanx 4 clearin it up that u wrote the first verse, that obviously makes it a lot better. unfortunately, the song still had no real point 2 it. there was nothing u could take away from it, no lesson u could learn. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Fresh-Ta-Def Posted July 25, 2005 Author Report Share Posted July 25, 2005 yeah i used to think it was cool to be gangster probally from all the FAKE rappers around you know and also my uncle was with the outlaws but yeah i used to think it was cool i admit it was stupid thought by th way do we have a section for like poems or should i post them in numero uno? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jonny 5 Posted July 25, 2005 Report Share Posted July 25, 2005 Yeah, poems are cool in Numero Uno, glad you cleared that up or it could have been 'interesting' :lolsign: Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
WesSyde Posted July 25, 2005 Report Share Posted July 25, 2005 hey do u mean the outlawz the rap group or just outlawz in general? sorry might seem like a dumb question. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jazzy Julie Posted July 25, 2005 Report Share Posted July 25, 2005 sorry to keep moaning at you, but in general, not just in here, u need to keep it clean, me and a few others have asked you to before. The word censor doesnt get it all as u can see. If u really have to say something put the stars in yourlself bcoz not every word gets picked up. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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