MissAshley Posted August 14, 2005 Report Share Posted August 14, 2005 (edited) i was reading some of the posts and poems/songs about some our members love issues so i threw this together, very simple, rap/poem, guess it depends on how you read it: This Thing Called Love two hearts with one beat two souls so in sync I cry and you hurt I give up, you make it work I'm blind and can't see no one else but you with me you're my rock, you're my soul one-half of this whole the future in our hands, your palms cradle mine stormy days filled with rain, your smile's my sunshine close your eyes, hold me close gimme more, gimme most of the love that's in waiting 'cuz i'm doubting and debating whether "we" could be enough if a plain path goes rough' if our ups turn to downs if our smiles turn to frowns if the world is now ending,and we only have each other a connection so unique, i love thee like no other our hands intertwined, your fingers grasping mine two loves now as one,and may God's will be done ----ashley Edited August 14, 2005 by willjadafan Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Fresh-Ta-Def Posted August 14, 2005 Report Share Posted August 14, 2005 well i read it as a poem but its really good good job girl Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
mfuqua23 Posted August 14, 2005 Report Share Posted August 14, 2005 Some lines that stuck out and really grabbed me... "of the love that's in waiting 'cuz i'm doubting and debating" "if the world is now ending,and we only have each other a connection so unique, i love thee like no other" I could see this poem being published in a book or something. U should post some of your poems at www.poetry.com . U could win anywhere from $1,000 to $10,000. I did it one time and was a finalist, but if I were to win, I wouldn't get the money becuz I didn't go to D.C. A shame really. But anyway, really amazing literary expression. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
PeaceAngel Posted August 15, 2005 Report Share Posted August 15, 2005 There was a good choice of words in that and they just flow really well. Great job on this!! :dope: Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bigted Posted August 15, 2005 Report Share Posted August 15, 2005 :iagree: Thanks for sharing, it's great! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Admin Hero1 Posted August 15, 2005 Admin Report Share Posted August 15, 2005 that was dope Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Turntable Posted August 15, 2005 Report Share Posted August 15, 2005 It`s great! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MissAshley Posted August 16, 2005 Author Report Share Posted August 16, 2005 thnx for your input guys, a lot of people seem to be liking this one outside the forum as well, i was really trying to tap back into my earlier stuff and just keep it simple but still evoke the same honest emotions and reactions from people...i did this one in like 15 mins, i was on autopilot lol but i'm working on something new and i haven't forgotten the piece i was supposed to continue for those of you that are familiar with my work :dope: Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Admin Hero1 Posted August 16, 2005 Admin Report Share Posted August 16, 2005 keeping it simple often produces the best results :rockon: Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Don Jiggy Posted August 16, 2005 Report Share Posted August 16, 2005 i like it, i also have been hit by a poetry bug that's been going around lately Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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