J-o-e Posted October 17, 2005 Report Share Posted October 17, 2005 What ya'll think? Postive and Negative feedback welcome Sometime I'm not the only one who tried to make a plan in life Get a good job. Steadily stressing to get a wife But i'm young and i've got plently of time for that Not dumb but haters keep thinking that i'm whack Try to brush them off but most of the time it's hard Emotions wrote inside a small little birthday card Sometime i wished that life could be so simple I can't describe how i feel just with a pencil Need a mic so I can tell ya'll how i really feel Shootings guns just to make yourself feel real? I'm asking you all now how are ya living? Prision just because we are all used to sinning If i was america's ten wanted can i be fly? Is that the real reason why you want me to die? I geuss i'm the guy destined to be on my own Living life to edge just because i'm simply alone I wanted to know where my life was really goin No mo' slanging drugs, no more never knowin Look i'm being truthful and sue me if you must Your best friend that you've grown to trust Even at the start we still fell abit apart You was my dawg that's why it's top of the chart If i could climb the highest moutin. I would Any fool got beef with you, remember you should Set the record straight and don't care who lost it Just remember the late nights completly exhasuted Somtime we wise that this beef could be stop We don't care what music that they drop Appreichate don't learn to hate. Should you Live the life that's what you had to go through This verse is to the girl who can make me blush Nothing but puppy love, a school girl crush But it seemed at the time that was nonsense You played defence and I was on the offence I keep it nice and simple with the tip of my pencil Whats a worse is that ya scared to wake up with a pimple When ya left me i thought there was a score to settle You can't leave the stove on for too long it will blow the kettle She put the pedal to the metal when she walked out the door I thought she was true but didn't see that chick anymore Sometimes i thought that it be cool to land a deal Feeling the top of the world but did it seem so real? I can't think what i want to write coz it don't seem tight waking up in the middle of the night feelin so light Getting so high but deepdown in side i'm so low Yeah i can flow but does that really matter now tho? I'm sick of sayin i hate beef when i just encourage it Looking back at my homies they didnt like **** So i figure to myself why think about pullin the trigger When the death tolls mean **** and they call me a wigger I wake up at night because that i had a bad dream I thought the showbizz was great but it just seems That thinking one thing and meaning the other So i ask my mother why's beef on the streets? greasy lovers But there's no point me getting worked up or is there? I had the second half of the pair but she didn't care But it seems that people only really understand the facts So step back and let the DJ choose the ****ing tracks Somtime we wise that this beef could be stop We don't care what music that they drop Appreichate don't learn to hate. Should you Live the life that's what you had to go through Let me take a sec to tell you my point of view Apologies are useless there way overdue Living life as good as i could on the block Homies can run up on you with the glock Or try to sneak up on you with a knife Threaten to kill you and your wife But to me doesn't that sound like a threat? Living the rest of your life working off a debt I watched life sail right by me and i didnt give a **** Stuck in rap and drugs i needed to quit Having trouble with cops in certain divisions Some mistakes bad but i'm sure i made the right decision I can't see when i'm driving, it's too mysty Didn't want none of my fisty, Dudes getting pissy +Can I Live+ Properly with all of this stress Tired of kissing ass trying to impress I do the things that matter to me, **** rap Had 1 more chance i'll give it all back As a child i used to wake up and see my momma Asked why is there so much beef and drama She said to me death is the pleasure of life Willing to have anything, that's the sacrifce If this does get listened to, It be way over budget Put a Bil behind it so nobody can touch it So before i complain more and be in neglection Only thing i've ever been afraid is rejection Somtime we wise that this beef could be stop We don't care what music that they drop Appreichate don't learn to hate. Should you Live the life that's what you had to go through :gettinjiggywitit: Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
mfuqua23 Posted October 17, 2005 Report Share Posted October 17, 2005 I can't describe how i feel just with a pencil - nice expression It's a decently nice rhyme. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members Snouf Posted October 17, 2005 Members Report Share Posted October 17, 2005 (edited) I can't describe how i feel just with a pencil - nice expression It's a decently nice rhyme. Yeah, I like this rhyme too! What you think about this little change? Sometime i wished that life could be so simple I can't describe how i feel without usin' a pencil Edited October 17, 2005 by Snouf Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
J-o-e Posted October 18, 2005 Author Report Share Posted October 18, 2005 I will deffo take that into consideration, thanks for your views guys! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
PeaceAngel Posted October 18, 2005 Report Share Posted October 18, 2005 I can't describe how i feel just with a pencil I think you should switch "just with" so it says "I can't describe how i feel with just a pencil." It seems to flow better that way, in my opinion. The lyrics were really good! Great way to describe emotions! :2thumbs: Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Da Brakes Posted October 18, 2005 Report Share Posted October 18, 2005 I can't describe how i feel just with a pencil I think you should switch "just with" so it says "I can't describe how i feel with just a pencil." It seems to flow better that way, in my opinion. The lyrics were really good! Great way to describe emotions! :2thumbs: I agree! It sounds better that way! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
J-o-e Posted October 18, 2005 Author Report Share Posted October 18, 2005 It's been changed thanks for ur views Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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