mfuqua23 Posted July 3, 2004 Report Share Posted July 3, 2004 (edited) This was written 4 the obvious reason. All the problems in this country. But this verse only covers one 4 the most part. Peep it. Written: June 23, 2004 (12:17 - 12:53 a.m.) Being poor is no joke, when ya traveling roads Tryna survive by love being all that U load Hungry and ya stomach growling terribly And ya thinkin "is there even one decent person who can be there 4 me?" The richys say "It ain't my problem, I'm livin it up" U got 2 much money 4 U, but U ain't given it up I'm sure U worked hard 4 the money and U deserve it but would it kill U 2 help out a few times in the world and turn it around, much like the axis does everyday Ya actionz determine more than what U say Sometimes, it'z like why bother cuz it'z hopeless Look bakc at my wordz thinkin I never should've wrote this Sometimes I wanna help, change the way we live Sometimes except the fact, that it's just the way it is And it'z up 2 whoever 2 change their surroundings of their area Learn what U gotta do when your Made In America ____ So any questions or comments? Edited July 3, 2004 by mfuqua23 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Prince Posted July 4, 2004 Report Share Posted July 4, 2004 Nice message you got going on in there. Is this just one verse taken from a song, and if there are other verses do they deal with some of the other issues of society? :dancingcool: Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
mfuqua23 Posted July 5, 2004 Author Report Share Posted July 5, 2004 Well, I've written 2 verses so far. The 1st verse is bout me. I'll post it in a topic. I could pretty much write bout anything dealing wit America. And it be 4 real. (unlike that JAdakiss "Why") Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
mfuqua23 Posted July 5, 2004 Author Report Share Posted July 5, 2004 Here's the verse I. June 22, 2004 (11:42 p.m. - 12:08 a.m.) In 1985, they said "Letz create a drug that destroys their race Call it crack and send it all over the place It dysfunctions the brain, rips apart the family name And limits the chances 4 changes 2 gain It got in our homes, and destroys the way we livin Took our parents love from us, and we did nothin but give in I was unaware, scared, but God was there Helped me get thru it when my survival was rare In the courts, the Fuquas the plaintiff, there was no defendant A lost soul wit no mother, but that just ended I look at the world now, and can't believe the ignorance How did they find it in their hearts 2 make a difference Ain't no sympathy but can U picture the imagery I've been told the story and now it'z part of my memory Those peoples lives I'm part of, think if I wasn't there 4 ya These R the dangers when your Made In America Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Prince Posted July 5, 2004 Report Share Posted July 5, 2004 Nice flow you got going on, also catchy. If you do another verse, I'm looking forward to reading it :dancingcool: Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
mfuqua23 Posted July 5, 2004 Author Report Share Posted July 5, 2004 Well, I'll probably do more verses on dayz I feel troubled in society. Like really really. There will probably be many verses when I'm all said and done. Thanks 4 ya feedback. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bigted Posted July 6, 2004 Report Share Posted July 6, 2004 I feel those verses, they're very similiar to the reality that I write about in my songs, we need more rappers that speak the truth in their rhymes, talkin' about things that many don't wanna talk about, I give you props for that. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
mfuqua23 Posted July 6, 2004 Author Report Share Posted July 6, 2004 Thanks. I just feel comfortable taht way Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Admin Hero1 Posted July 7, 2004 Admin Report Share Posted July 7, 2004 very nice stuff keep it up Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
mfuqua23 Posted July 7, 2004 Author Report Share Posted July 7, 2004 Thanks, u know I will. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bigted Posted July 7, 2004 Report Share Posted July 7, 2004 I wrote a verse recently that's very similiar to the theme that ur talkin' about, I guess great minds think alike! :thumb: Peep this: "It all comes from a down moment Hypocrite bums are now folding 'Cause they thought the spotlight would shine out bright on them For all eternity, words are deadly Y'all ask for mercy, but your ass is hurting Those below you, they won't console you When they find their way ahead And your spotlight blurs away slipping You can break in a minute When I finish this sentence It's gonna be the beginning of ya ending And all our clocks are ticking Every moment we're living We shouldn't take for granted 'Cause love ones today are passing For somebody, we see them dying in war in a gas tank That exploded by a terroist We're losing our own fellow Americans And our worldwide friends That are humans beings tryin' to be livin' In peace but that's a trajedy to swallow again A daughter that isn't comin' home to her parents A brother that went over to try to make a livin' All the sacrifices are blessings 'Cause they died to give us protection But yet we m.c's always talk bout the ice on our neck Or all the shine on our wrists Talkin' like a bunch of children Why do we have to lie in illness? Let's put the line on what we're building By making a perfect plan Getting the momentum in ya hand Is what seperates the wisdom from a boy to a man" It would be great to see more rappers speak their minds like we do, more people will wanna listen to hip-hop than they do now if this happens! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Admin Hero1 Posted July 7, 2004 Admin Report Share Posted July 7, 2004 doooopppeee!! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
mfuqua23 Posted July 8, 2004 Author Report Share Posted July 8, 2004 Jeez bigted, this is wat, the 2nd time we had similar. If this keep up, we could end up havin enuff 4 a collab album. Ya rhyme was good, but I had trouble following it. Probably cuz I don't write in short line like that anymore. But it was good. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bigted Posted July 8, 2004 Report Share Posted July 8, 2004 Hey FUQ I'm always lookin' forward to collaborate wit peeps that know how to speak their minds and not do what everyone else is doing 'cause we can change the game! Holla back! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Da Brakes Posted July 8, 2004 Report Share Posted July 8, 2004 I'm lovin' it man!!! :thumb: Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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