J-o-e Posted November 10, 2005 Report Share Posted November 10, 2005 Now let me take a second because it ain’t easy Don’t think I only went out with you to please me Girl I’m not that sleazy you were more to me than that I don’t know what happened I geuss I just snapped Even before I rapped I knew that you had a lot of care When we both had nothing you always had something to share Feel like this ain’t fair I know because you didn’t care bout clothes I geuss that **** happens wasn’t that the way it goes Believe me I ain’t no average joe, and I done shown you You was my queen and on that note I done throned you Talking on the phone you was the best thing that happened That was back then before we both started snappin’ Rapping at each others throat because we didn’t think I still remember the first day we met with your blink I had to have a drink. Maybe it’s the time for the tissues I am sorry if your piroities and mine was misued Lets just say I had issues, With that note this is a letter Just to say that nobody ever loved me better A real drama setter, taught me everything that I knew She made me happy every time that I felt blue…. Baby girl this is a love letter Just to say no one done me better You was my girl my best friend I would of done all that again… At times I still think about you while looking into night Look ahead because I know that your future is bright Let you into an insight, had me wrapped around a finger Had a beautiful voice still don’t know why she was a singer Geuss she was a stinger, but please just listen to me I’m telling you this wasn’t the man I planned to be I wish you could see, made me go all crazy You were more to me than just my pretty baby A lady, that’s why I really do hate to leave ya But at the end of the long road I believe ya When I call pick up the receiver. I wasn’t pretending I wasn’t breaking the rules I geuss I was bending Your love I wasn’t lending even if you think that I steal Take a second to look in my eyes and think isit real? Remember time will heal, first time I saw you was so hot I remember that I didn’t feel like I even had a shot I geuss it was a not, but then you proved me so wrong I know this is a road of life but realistically its not that long Just remember that when you happy and give us a smile We know that everythings ok and its going to be all worthwile… Baby girl this is a love letter Just to say no one done me better You was my girl my best friend I would of done all that again… Now let me take everyone back into time A day in the past that you was actually mine No time to rhyme I had to think back and it shocked me Your love didn’t do anything but it rocked me Like you socked me, hit me in the face I geuss it’s true Im nothing but a pure disgrace Tied the shoes to my lace. You was the phone who was down Who never backed down and still acted like a clown Put away that frown. If I hurt you I apologyse But if I was still with you I would be living a lie Deep inside I cry but deep down my names on the pavement To women anywhere this is a true and deep statement Its my creatment so please baby girl keep ya head up Even if your worried bout all of them cops whos currupt So wasup? If I rang you in a few years would you still talk Baby I can pick you up and then we can go for a walk If im not laying in chalk you know the gangster risks But always had my back and never meant to disturb **** That’s why I quit. I didn’t want you to be in the life I lead Full of greed but I loved you more than my unborn seed…. Baby girl this is a love letter Just to say no one done me better You was my girl my best friend I would of done all that again… What Ya'll Think? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Angel Amor Posted November 11, 2005 Report Share Posted November 11, 2005 nicely done joe Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
mfuqua23 Posted November 11, 2005 Report Share Posted November 11, 2005 "I don’t know what happened I geuss I just snapped" "That was back then before we both started snappin’" - It's nothing seriously wrong with this, but it probably helps if U use the same word to end a line, they shouldn't be so far apart. If possible, try to find another fitting word to describe what you both did. Same idea with the "rapping/rapped" "I still remember the first day we met with your blink"- what is blink? I'm not too familar if that's a slang term. "Had a beautiful voice still don’t know why she was a singer" - this is an example of what I'm about to get at. Most of this song is str8 to the girl. You should make it that entirely. Sometimes, you do what to speak out to your audience about the situation, but in a song like this, I really think it'd be best if you didn't do that. It just pulls the song together better. Other than the points I made, it was fine. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
kbfprince Posted November 11, 2005 Report Share Posted November 11, 2005 "I still remember the first day we met with your blink" - same thing as FuQ I agree with making the song directly towards the girl, otherwise it's heartfelt and very nice. :yeah: Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
PeaceAngel Posted November 11, 2005 Report Share Posted November 11, 2005 "I still remember the first day we met with your blink" - same thing as FuQ I agree with making the song directly towards the girl, otherwise it's heartfelt and very nice. :yeah: ^^ I agree with what they said, but other than that, those were really good lyrics! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mike Posted November 12, 2005 Report Share Posted November 12, 2005 awesome song, i love writing love rhymes so this one i can relate to :2thumbs: Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members Snouf Posted November 12, 2005 Members Report Share Posted November 12, 2005 You know I like lyrics like this if it comes from the heart, keep doing your thing bro!! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Chief Posted November 20, 2005 Report Share Posted November 20, 2005 amen to that... Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Admin Hero1 Posted November 20, 2005 Admin Report Share Posted November 20, 2005 nice effort Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
willreign Posted November 20, 2005 Report Share Posted November 20, 2005 ver nice... "Baby girl this is a love letter" so simple but yet so complicated sentece... good luck... Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Chief Posted November 20, 2005 Report Share Posted November 20, 2005 got anymore joe? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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