Trey Posted March 29, 2006 Author Report Share Posted March 29, 2006 *Bump* for those who haven't read! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Da Brakes Posted March 29, 2006 Report Share Posted March 29, 2006 *Bump* for those who haven't read! Seriously dude, you dont need to bump your threads. People will see them Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Trey Posted March 30, 2006 Author Report Share Posted March 30, 2006 Sorry, Brakes. :( Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
thePrince Posted March 30, 2006 Report Share Posted March 30, 2006 Especially don't "bump" topics that aren't worth bumping. I agree with Jonny, this is nothing special. At best it displays pre-pubescent lyricism with no wordplay, basic rhyme schemes, basic sentence structure, poor vocabulary, etc. Improve word play, vocabulary, structure, rhyme scheme, lyricism etc and then maybe your topics will deserve "bumping". You don't want to turn into another "Renagade" style disaster, so don't let it happen. Keep on practising, and you'll improve. But you can only improve if you constantly constructively critisize yourself for what you do. When you write things like this, and think it wonderful, you can never improve. If you write something, realise that you could have done better, and done things differently, then you can improve by identifying what these things are, and changing your outlook next time round. If you try your best, then we can give you advise to support you, and in turn you'll grow as lyricists (that's what this forum is about). But as it is just now, you aren't getting anywhere. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Luigie Posted March 31, 2006 Report Share Posted March 31, 2006 (edited) Especially don't "bump" topics that aren't worth bumping. I agree with Jonny, this is nothing special. At best it displays pre-pubescent lyricism with no wordplay, basic rhyme schemes, basic sentence structure, poor vocabulary, etc. Improve word play, vocabulary, structure, rhyme scheme, lyricism etc and then maybe your topics will deserve "bumping". You don't want to turn into another "Renagade" style disaster, so don't let it happen. Keep on practising, and you'll improve. But you can only improve if you constantly constructively critisize yourself for what you do. When you write things like this, and think it wonderful, you can never improve. If you write something, realise that you could have done better, and done things differently, then you can improve by identifying what these things are, and changing your outlook next time round. If you try your best, then we can give you advise to support you, and in turn you'll grow as lyricists (that's what this forum is about). But as it is just now, you aren't getting anywhere. I dont agree wit "bumpin" but readin dis is very worth...at least for Da Homeboyz, so dont talk like dis is all bout u, the purpose of dis forum is to give advices, not to post really cool songs, sumtimes u would do it, but sumtimes u'll have to recieve advices, so to all the ppl who read n dont post, post, at least say "dis is trash" Edited March 31, 2006 by Luigie Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Trey Posted March 31, 2006 Author Report Share Posted March 31, 2006 (edited) :paperbag: Edited March 31, 2006 by Trey Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lerkot Posted March 31, 2006 Report Share Posted March 31, 2006 Especially don't "bump" topics that aren't worth bumping. I agree with Jonny, this is nothing special. At best it displays pre-pubescent lyricism with no wordplay, basic rhyme schemes, basic sentence structure, poor vocabulary, etc. Improve word play, vocabulary, structure, rhyme scheme, lyricism etc and then maybe your topics will deserve "bumping". You don't want to turn into another "Renagade" style disaster, so don't let it happen. Keep on practising, and you'll improve. But you can only improve if you constantly constructively critisize yourself for what you do. When you write things like this, and think it wonderful, you can never improve. If you write something, realise that you could have done better, and done things differently, then you can improve by identifying what these things are, and changing your outlook next time round. If you try your best, then we can give you advise to support you, and in turn you'll grow as lyricists (that's what this forum is about). But as it is just now, you aren't getting anywhere. I dont agree wit "bumpin" but readin dis is very worth...at least for Da Homeboyz, so dont talk like dis is all bout u, the purpose of dis forum is to give advices, not to post really cool songs, sumtimes u would do it, but sumtimes u'll have to recieve advices, so to all the ppl who read n dont post, post, at least say "dis is trash" Why the **** have you started to write like renagade? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Trey Posted March 31, 2006 Author Report Share Posted March 31, 2006 We have? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Luigie Posted March 31, 2006 Report Share Posted March 31, 2006 :blabla: :blabla: Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jonny 5 Posted March 31, 2006 Report Share Posted March 31, 2006 :blabla: :blabla: na, Lerk's got a point, you've taken a wrong turn somewhere... Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
thePrince Posted March 31, 2006 Report Share Posted March 31, 2006 Corrupted by idiots (Renagade). Interesting how people change... not always for the better. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest VAsFinestRenagade Posted March 31, 2006 Report Share Posted March 31, 2006 stop trashin me Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Luigie Posted March 31, 2006 Report Share Posted March 31, 2006 wat makes me so "Renagade" :hmm: :hmm: Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Trey Posted April 1, 2006 Author Report Share Posted April 1, 2006 wat makes me so "Renagade" :hmm: :hmm: Luigie, I don't want this to turn into a fighting topic, so just leave it alone. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Luigie Posted April 1, 2006 Report Share Posted April 1, 2006 k, gotta chill...sorry if my post was offensive or sumthin, just will keep workin! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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