Mike Posted March 16, 2006 Report Share Posted March 16, 2006 (edited) wow!! ok so i put a RJD2 beat on my computer and its very good, pena keeps on telling me that i should use it, so im listening to him. the beat is "Ghost Writer" off of Deadringer. So i wrote lyrics to it, just so i could have a good flow, and its very good. I have more than half done (beat and lyrics) i just have to record my voice to it which ive been practicing but i wanna get it perfect. so dinner is soon so im gonna stop practcing so my voice has a rest. then ill record and try to put it up tonight!! it will be on my mysapce too, but im putting it on here first cause thats how i do :mrt2: heres the lyrics so you can see, until its all done Extra Terrestrial Written by Mike We dream about the sun, moon, space and the stars and wonder if alien dreams are similar to ours To escape out world, to finally get away Dreams about the sun at night and the moon during the day how could they live similar lives like we live? Could they pollute and offer drugs like the drugs we give? Intellegent thoughtflow, express though the arts They know the anatomy so they pick out the parts Take the Lungs, stomach, liver, and some of the veins Leave the rest for us cause we wasted our brains Squashed the heart, it wasnt pumping sh!t And Definatly not going into anything that we spit They're taking over man, there's nothing we can do Can you lend me a gun, so i can take out one or two? I wanna save my soul, and the body, the carrier Dont submit to the enemy, help me build the barrier Pull me by my wrist on the ship, im aboard See the things they took, a pen, a mic, and a sword Pen:lyrics and bills. sword: thrills and kills And the mic: speech, power and, dreams fufilled But nothing they can take to represent the love Only images of hate, a push and a shove And i wonder to myself, what kinda view The rest of their planet will have of me and you I mean the people with heart, people with soul Opposed to the ones who have to have control I explained our race, and the diffence of people Explained love, religion, Jesus and the steaple It looked back with almost all understanding thats when i shouted and started demanding "You can't fvck sh!t up the same that we did! We didnt take the love, took what you had to get rid See we got caught up in power like you Too late before we realized we knew Any world war is really a civil war So why the hell should you fight yourself for?" COMMENTS EDIT:should i change the name to close encounter, or maybe like outer intelligence..something like that Edited March 16, 2006 by WILL IS ILL Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mike Posted March 17, 2006 Author Report Share Posted March 17, 2006 no one can say anything? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Schnazz Posted March 17, 2006 Report Share Posted March 17, 2006 Interesting concept, if I understand it right... but I don't think you really conveyed it as well as you could have. The connection between the aliens and ourselves seemed too obvious to be an in your "ah ha!" type thing and too sublte to be a blatent story. But that's just my take, I could be completely misunderstanding your intentions. :) Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mike Posted March 17, 2006 Author Report Share Posted March 17, 2006 (edited) im not really getting what your saying Edited March 17, 2006 by WILL IS ILL Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ash trey Posted March 17, 2006 Report Share Posted March 17, 2006 Nice! Cant wait for the audio! Ur lyrical talent is undeniable! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mike Posted March 17, 2006 Author Report Share Posted March 17, 2006 (edited) heres the audio http://www.rapidshare.fr/download.php?id=8WfvFigl feedback on audio PLEASE! dont just read this and not reply!! Edited March 17, 2006 by WILL IS ILL Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Luigie Posted March 17, 2006 Report Share Posted March 17, 2006 It was really good! :2thumbs: but this part See we got caught up in power like you Too late before we realized we knew Any world war is really a civil war So why the hell should you fight yourself for?" u wasnt followin too much the beat, but most of the audio is good! nice work man! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mike Posted March 17, 2006 Author Report Share Posted March 17, 2006 i dropped the beat on purpose to enphasie those last to lines "any world war is really a civil war so why the hell should you fight yourself for" PLEASE LISTEN IF YOU HAVENT---feedback Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Luigie Posted March 18, 2006 Report Share Posted March 18, 2006 ok..well it was my first impression Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ash trey Posted March 18, 2006 Report Share Posted March 18, 2006 The audio is suprisingly good u have a good flow and quite a unique voice.Keep it up- JJFP.com has found yet anotha budding talented recording artist. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
J-o-e Posted March 18, 2006 Report Share Posted March 18, 2006 its good but i dont see anyone having a top 10 hit talking about aliens...but its good! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lerkot Posted March 18, 2006 Report Share Posted March 18, 2006 its good but i dont see anyone having a top 10 hit talking about aliens...but its good! You dont see much, do you? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jazzy Julie Posted March 18, 2006 Report Share Posted March 18, 2006 its good but i dont see anyone having a top 10 hit talking about aliens...but its good! erm, men in black lol. Yeah its good, i like it when people write about stuff thats different from the norm. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
kbfprince Posted March 20, 2006 Report Share Posted March 20, 2006 (edited) a little off on the flow in the very beginning, id add more emotion, not a lot cause the song doesn't require it but it would be better if you would come off a little harder in the first verse. like a little bit too early in saying 'im aboard' in the 2nd verse, but thats just my opinion. add a couple syllables to 'See we got caught up in power like you Too late before we realized we knew' cause you had to pause on the second line and it cut off your flow. its a nice song throughout, keep it up! :2thumbs: oh btw nice concept once again Edited March 20, 2006 by kbfprince Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
J-o-e Posted March 20, 2006 Report Share Posted March 20, 2006 Yea men in black...someone's been there and done it, i'm not doubting the lyrics or the content, it's a good song!! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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