Members Fresh Ali Posted March 20, 2006 Members Report Share Posted March 20, 2006 I must say that it´s a good song.But some lines are better then others.But at all it´s very good. You have talent. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
PeaceAngel Posted March 20, 2006 Report Share Posted March 20, 2006 a little off on the flow in the very beginning, id add more emotion, not a lot cause the song doesn't require it but it would be better if you would come off a little harder in the first verse. like a little bit too early in saying 'im aboard' in the 2nd verse, but thats just my opinion. add a couple syllables to 'See we got caught up in power like you Too late before we realized we knew' cause you had to pause on the second line and it cut off your flow. its a nice song throughout, keep it up! :2thumbs: oh btw nice concept once again :word: I agree with what she said. The flow was off in a few places but overall it was a really good song. Nice job man! :2thumbs: Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mike Posted March 21, 2006 Author Report Share Posted March 21, 2006 i did many recordings so i probaly used the version that sounded the best but i didnt do some other things. what im gettign at is the lines you talked about, i rapped "see we got caught up in power like you too late before we realized that we knew" but i do agree with you guys that it wasnt perfect, my flow is a little off and my voice isnt perfect, but it was my first recording. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mike Posted March 25, 2006 Author Report Share Posted March 25, 2006 i would like to announce that on myspace my song has had 61 listens in 4 days Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
PeaceAngel Posted March 25, 2006 Report Share Posted March 25, 2006 That's cool! :2thumbs: Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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