Jump to content
JJFP reunite for 50 years of Hip Hop December 10 ×
Jazzy Jeff & Fresh Prince Forum

My first effort


ash trey

Recommended Posts

I know I don't really compare to any/most lyricists here like FuQ, Joe or even Lerkot and Tiffy lol.But here goes nothing....Its called T.R.E.Y

Soon as the bass starts kickin',

And Trey starts spittin',

Ur ears are exposed to my hip-hop mission,

Beating suka emcees into submisssion,

U can make noise for all da wack rhymers since dey only pumpin' def beats,

But when I get on da mic I wanna see da mumbling gets ceased,

I wish they could privatise sum of these public emceez,

I walk up to ur screaming ass-Say "easy duz it" and leave,

Cuz when u spittin',

U forgettin' theres supposed to be an art form u reppin',

Cuz u dishonuring the real artists and veterans,

Believe me its tricky as said by D and the reverend,

But my skills stay higher than the rest like Bob Marley,

So I just kick back and spit rap classics like La Di Da Di,

Suddenly everbody wants to feel hard spit raps and act up,

But I don't see skills like it ain't time for a rap-up

Chorus x 2

Its da T to the R to the E to the Y,

U can try but u can't get by,

Lyrical skill dat u cannot deny

(Slick Rick Sample)- and when I roc upon da mic I roc da mic right

Im a lyrical documentary I give u straight facs and u havt to take it,

U exhibit nothing but fakeness u animated,

Im a michrophone fiend straight up rap fanatic,

And u know its legit since I studied its science and mathematics,

Im on advanced calculus u don't understand basic addition,

And thats why my lyrical poweress is hard to envision,

I'm da perfect design,

I equal an MC squared da Einstein of rhyme,

U not inclined to find,

More skill at a black smiths,

Ur a trick and a phony like an actress,

U need to rethink ur tactics,

Take some time to practice,

Cuz da fact is,

It takes more than gift wrap and ribbions to outrap this

Chorus x 2

-----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------

Ok I bragged a little too much on the track :lolsign: . Any feedback :stickpoke:

Link to comment
Share on other sites

It's a good track for the first time u've ever done one like this, And In my school all I done at lunch was freestyle with some friends, So i'm probably alot more used to taking a beating or giving one, haha but keep it up Trey man....good job!

Link to comment
Share on other sites

Was this really your first effort at writing? For a beginner that was very good.

Link to comment
Share on other sites

Thanks y'all!

@ Brakes and JP- It was my first effort as far as seriously writing something down but I keep thinking up rhymes and ideas for songs all da time!

I guess since this was my first real effort I can only get better right?

Ok now any negative feedback?

Positive feedback is welcome too lol.

Link to comment
Share on other sites

Join the conversation

You can post now and register later. If you have an account, sign in now to post with your account.

Guest
Reply to this topic...

×   Pasted as rich text.   Paste as plain text instead

  Only 75 emoji are allowed.

×   Your link has been automatically embedded.   Display as a link instead

×   Your previous content has been restored.   Clear editor

×   You cannot paste images directly. Upload or insert images from URL.

Loading...
×
×
  • Create New...