MissAshley Posted May 3, 2006 Report Share Posted May 3, 2006 (edited) Broken Word so much to say, yet the words won't emerge I must piece them together,and help them converge find common ground so I can get back to "self" for being without words is affecting my health forget doubting thomas, because now i'm doubting me trapped within thoughts, can't find my way free a million questions in my mind... when did I break the ties that bind? what if my rhymes weren't as strong? my verse wasn't quite as long? it's like an ongoing cycle of before and after but with every bit of pain, comes some form of love and laughter i put pen to paper, and let spill my heart and the final piece of the puzzle is like a brilliant work of art a materpiece in the mold of DaVinci or Van Gogh I put out good karma, still I reap what I sow this is just a phase, and eventually it passes so I can continue on my quest to captivate the masses if I were a rapper...yeah well... we've been there before so I hope and I pray that there's much more in store -ash Edited May 3, 2006 by MissAshley Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Luigie Posted May 3, 2006 Report Share Posted May 3, 2006 Wow, amazin lines Miss Ashley, dat was a nice read :2thumbs: Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
3cookies Posted May 3, 2006 Report Share Posted May 3, 2006 aww. miss ashley, that was real nice to read. I enjoyed the way you expressed urself in this piece... Keep writing babygurl... peace, cookie Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Admin Hero1 Posted May 3, 2006 Admin Report Share Posted May 3, 2006 very nice! it reminds me of something i'd write :lolsign: we must think about the same stuff.. :wickedwisdom: Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Loco Posted May 3, 2006 Report Share Posted May 3, 2006 very good Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MissAshley Posted May 4, 2006 Author Report Share Posted May 4, 2006 thnx guys, I actually wasn't too sure about it, you can tell it's a post writer's block piece lol Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
mfuqua23 Posted May 4, 2006 Report Share Posted May 4, 2006 (edited) for being without words is affecting my health - For you and writers alike. I like that line. a million questions in my mind... when did I break the ties that bind? what if my rhymes weren't as strong? my verse wasn't quite as long? - One of the things I love is when questions are put in to make the audience think. I tend to do that a lot myself when I write. if I were a rapper...yeah well... we've been there before so I hope and I pray that there's much more in store - Really nice ending, but I have a question about it. What exactly did you mean when you said "we've been there before"? How did that situation play out? Edited May 4, 2006 by mfuqua23 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MissAshley Posted May 4, 2006 Author Report Share Posted May 4, 2006 thnx for the feedback FuQ, I was just talking about the other poem "If I were a Rapper" and all the stuff I talked about in that one, that's all lol Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
mfuqua23 Posted May 4, 2006 Report Share Posted May 4, 2006 Ah ok. I thought there was more to it than that. haha Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
J-o-e Posted May 5, 2006 Report Share Posted May 5, 2006 A very nice rhyme there MissAshley, I was listening to "Freeze" By LL Cool J and it was the perfect beat for it...Keep up the great work Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Angel Amor Posted May 5, 2006 Report Share Posted May 5, 2006 I like this...it's very good MissAshley :yeah: :2thumbs: Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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