J-o-e Posted November 21, 2006 Report Share Posted November 21, 2006 Yo wasup, Jus done 2 verses for this track called "Why" Thought ya'll want to see it, I think it's pretty decent but not finished yet...jus wanted to get some opinoins... Why Why…I Have 2 Feel This Way Why…I Got 2 Say This Today Why…I Hate Feeling This Way Why…Is the Sky Always Grey? Back in when we was in high school high, always knew why That I would be the guy who would ride, but then jus cry I’ve been dreaming bout me and u, doing thing’s we shouldn’t I loved your personality, but deep down I knew I couldn’t Out of my league, not in popularity, but in any existence We became closer has friends, no longer I had resistance Asked for advice, I kept gritting my teeth jus to be nice I knew in the long run that talking on the phone wouldn’t suffice It’s not good enough, baby I’ve dreamed for me n u 2 be true But will my dream ever come through? What do I have 2 do? Have a finger on your hand, and then call you my loyal wife? Because I want to live as much as I can, while I have a short life No more apologizes; I can no longer smile in front of your face I feel like I’m disgraced, I just don’t want to meet up in another place… Why…I Have 2 Feel This Way Why…I Got 2 Say This Today Why…I Hate Feeling This Way Why…Is the Sky Always Grey? Always thought we would be destiny, how could fate ever lie 2 me? I’m having nervous breakdowns, screaming down the phone 2 cry 2 me I only asked why, my minds been on a different course, no remorse But the day u admit that u love me, will I be as still as tupac’s corpse? It’s a short life we have, but I damn sure want to live it while I’m in it I just want to prove to you I’m not a gimmick, just give me a minute I know u like pretty boys, who buy u fancy things when they can But u know me as a real man, give me an extra verse for u 2 understand How could I take away Ur happiness and make sure u we’re sad? The thought alone made me glad, but sick with my self and so damn mad I’m an MC, so expressing how I feel is one of the ways I entertain But on the wrong side of the lane, risking my life jus for this fame? If we could be I’d get a dead end job, but instead I living to die I never am the type to cry, but all I ever wanted was a reason why… Why…I Have 2 Feel This Way Why…I Got 2 Say This Today Why…I Hate Feeling This Way Why…Is the Sky Always Grey? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Turntable Posted November 22, 2006 Report Share Posted November 22, 2006 I'm curious about how you gonna flow that, but I think the concept is great. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
mfuqua23 Posted November 22, 2006 Report Share Posted November 22, 2006 Your gonna need a slower beat I think. It's well-written overall. My favorite lines I read was... "Asked for advice, I kept gritting my teeth jus to be nice" "But u know me as a real man, give me an extra verse for u 2 understand" - I don't know if you made a typo, but change the 'give me an extra verse' to 'give you an extra verse'. Just makes better sense to a listening audience. "How could I take away Ur happiness and make sure u we’re sad? The thought alone made me glad, but sick with my self and so damn mad" - Unless you explain it to me, I really don't understand these lines. You might have to fix and really think about what your saying. "I’m an MC, so expressing how I feel is one of the ways I entertain But on the wrong side of the lane, risking my life jus for this fame?" - Nice one. Feel where ya comin' from. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bigted Posted December 3, 2006 Report Share Posted December 3, 2006 Nothin' but the truth baby, keep it up for real! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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